Day Thirty
I like a poem because it's not like a painting.Because I'll confidently cradle something
stainless; hold the exceptional eye of it,which is sarsen grey. It's accurate masonry.A poem is trapezoidal.It will sit on the ground, you can walkaround, point prosodicright at the solidity of the stanza.The straight line in a meter, go -run your thumb assuredlyall along the perfect surface;Any line with a defectlies forgotten in the quarry.That's why I like a poem. At leastin theory, shaped pure andfine-finished as a citadel.But I wonder if Machu Picchu thinks- or even knows - about the faultsin her foundation. She's sitting up thereon the nerve of a natural defect,and she don't give a damn.So I did some painting, to be like the Inca.To be painted, myself, whimsical-like.And the acrylics were so alien, theywere such a clamour of colour, theywere howling! All striving -Idiots! - mucking and muddlingand setting themselves too previous.I almost kicked over the easel.But, like the Inca, I learneda bit about building. About drainage.I began to see the sky bloom purple,fruit ripening in stone,an uncertainty of green in the grass.I built something new, and I found
I did not so much mind the cracks.
Okay, it's a little skew whiff.My brush, he forgets the meter;
only knows a ruffled rhythm
of colour, that might?
breathe life to a sarsen stone.
Even, perhaps, in purple tones,refute the sky and its blueness.So step back, squint your eyes;It looks just like a poem.
I like the slightly skew-whiff feel of this, like your not quite right colours, the stones about to tumble, the lines of the poem that maybe won't scan.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I was trying to riff a bit on my uncertain style, starting sterile and then adding some chaos and ending with a bit of freedom. I think I sort of got it... maybe? Heh.
DeleteYou did, but I got caution rather than uncertainty in the beginning, measuring, getting the perspective right. You need to know the rules before you can break them. My motto and I'm sticking to it. Btw I'm Jane Dougherty, not anonymous, Google.
ReplyDeleteYes, caution is a better way to put it. Appreciate the feedback, Jane :)
DeleteHi,
ReplyDeleteI decided to make four centos out of our final Day 30 lines. I used all last 96 poems written in April as linked to the official NaPoWriMo site. Today I posted the last of the four centos, the one with your lines. Please read it here:
https://manjameximexcessive6.wordpress.com/2023/05/27/four-april-centos-no-4/
Thank you kindly for your words. They make for a nice finish to all my four centos.
Be well,
Manja